Pushed by the waves blossomed with love
What is there to mine in a miry Lotus-cove?
Once a soul’s light danced into the Aurora
Form you not a fruit of your mind’s desire?
November 20, 2011
Lotus
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November 20, 2011 at 9:59 pm
Cem,
No one has the right to change or edit anyone else’s poem, but I’m busting in because otherwise, the end of the poem is senseless
You wrote:
Once a soul’s light danced into the Aurora
Form you not a fruit of your mind’s desire?
I suggest “Form, is this not the fruit of mind’s desire.”
And I deserve 20 floggings for taking a right that was not appropriate.
peace, play,
mickey
November 20, 2011 at 10:26 pm
To form darling…Do you not form a fruit of your mind’s desire?
Instead of 20 slashes I give you:
http://cemcatbas.wordpress.com/2011/03/09/poetry/
Love
November 21, 2011 at 4:47 pm
Your gift is a superb replacement for 20 lashes. Yes, I guess I do form a fruit of my mind’s desire. But I still think the wording is off somehow to me:
Once a soul’s light danced into the Aurora
Form you not a fruit of your mind’s desire?
Maybe a comma after Aurora would solve any misunderstanding.
It’s very nice communicating with you. My son and his wife live in DC, close to you . . . he is in his 2nd year at Georgetown Law in human rights; his wife just started her master’s at John Hopkins School of Public Policy. Maybe you’ll meet someday.
peace with you, my friend,
mickey
November 21, 2011 at 10:23 pm
Likewise
Love